4'd
I like the melodies here, really great.
One thing that bugged me though was the peaking and clipping with the higher piano notes. Try adding a compressor on the piano's master channel so that they never pass -0db.
I like the use of the pad and the piano though, that was a pretty clever combination!
One final thing I would suggest is to use more reeverb and delay. They make a world of difference.
Anyway, thanks for the heads up, and let me know when you submit more!
woow :p nice review :D
thank you ;-)
uuhm, ok i'll try :p, there will come certainly another version of this one, in one of these days when i got nexus :p , then i'll look at what you've said ! ;-)
uuhm, on what should i use more reeverb and delay ? what part? just on piano? or on the pad ?
Thanks man! awesome review :p ;-)
Grts
Fredgy
I've heard that before..
'Cept it went:
Here I sit, all broken-hearted
Tried to shit, but only farted
Then one day I took a chance,
tried to fart and shit my pants.
Cheers
well, people tend to change things as time goes by, its a classic bathroom graffiti, i've seen it in like four places, all different versions.so i made up my own.
4'd
Here's my constructive criticism/review:
The piano at the beginning could use some reeverb and delay effects.
There's minor peaking when the saw synth comes in around :50. The melodies and harmonies are pretty good. Could use some more EQing and mastering work, though.
Other than that, it's pretty good. Keep it up!
thanks for checking out the song :D happy to see you got my PM! Thanks for the constructive criticism, Helth just PMd me saying how amazing it was that you reviewed the song... lol :D
Thanks for the review!
Your Fellow Newgrounder,
-gamerworld14
Some good ideas, but needs MAJOR tweaking
First off, let me say I cringe at your choice of chord progression. You couldn't have used ANY others? This whole idea of transitioning to the fifth that is constantly used in dance songs is overrated and abused beyond belief.
That being said, while this isn't a dance song in the slightest, I still can't say I enjoy hearing the same musical idea in a different genre.
Secondly, the orchestral voices you are using are painful to listen to. Obviously i'm going to be biased since i'm using a relatively similar VSTi (unless you are using Edirol as well, as I noticed several familiar sample stock sounds like the drumroll, gong, et al) but seriously. They sound shrill and synthetic.
Thirdly, your melodies have NO dynamic range. They do not convey crescendos or decrescendos and anyone with a musical background will notice that these lines sound static and plain when they should sound dynamic and flexible. The tuba hits in the slow section are particularly out of place. They have too hard of an attack and take away from the plucks.
On a final note, you should realize that i'm going to criticize you as harshly as possible, as you are my competition. Please take what i'm saying as a way to improve. That being said, this is a fairly good piece of work, but at the same time needs a great deal of improvement.
Thanks for reading and please feel free to critique my work and the other contestants'! :]
Cheers man, to be honest that's the first brutally honest review I've ever had, and I thank you for it!
I will definitely take this stuff on board, and study some more classical music too ;)
All the best, and good luck! :)
4'd Has potential
It's not great technically speaking, but I would assume you're just starting out, which is perfectly okay.
Some of my earlier stuff was the same way.
Musically it's intriguing, though.
Just keep at it and keep experimenting!
Yeah, I am just starting out. I'm glad you think that I have potential!
So simple, yet...
...so mesmerizing.
The ambiance here is very well done.
Musically, it's wonderful, a couple technical issues here and there, but nothing that damages the aesthetic entertainment.
Good work, and keep it up!
Thank you for your review, it means much to me ;)
Good start, needs mastering
Musically it's fine, but everything is too loud, 'specially the drums. There is clipping throughout the song.
Try lowering the volume of everything, and then adding a compressor to limit the frequencies and then raise the bass (this will make the bass louder without peaking.)
Other than that, good show
Ok, i'll try to do! :)
Really thank you for the advice, ;-)
and thanks for listening :)
Grts
Fredgy
Good start
This is a good start to something very moving, here a few pointers on improving the technical side so as to support the musical side:
Add stereo-enhancing, reeverb, and delay effects - these will add a richer sound to the track. The piano is a bit dry and obviously computerized because it lacks these elements.
EQ - The track itself is very bright, compress the upper end of the sound spectrum and enhance the lower end. Make the kick louder
Finally, it feels very top heavy as there is no bass. If a bass was playing alongside the kick it would be much, much more powerful.
Oh, and to ensure a more appropriate listening audience, make sure the genre fits the song. For this I would have classified it as either hiphop or miscellaneous.
Keep it up!
About that: "Oh, and to ensure a more appropriate listening audience, make sure the genre fits the song. For this I would have classified it as either hiphop or miscellaneous."
Sorrys, I'm bad with that xD, I never know what genre are my song :S.
Thanks for the coments, I'm not english so I'll try to understand what are you saying to try to use it, actually I cant modify that song :/.
~Bru2712.
N.I.C.E.
This has both a musical and technical wonder to it.
You've definitely got something good going here.
Hopefully we'll be seeing something like this on the EP! :P
5/5
Haha ye im still working on the one for the EP its almost finished =).
Thanks for the review man!
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